Name : Tsunayoshi Sawada (Cartoon character)
Story Excerpt :
"Tsuna! Tsu-Kun! You're going to be late again!" Tsuna's mother hollered to Tsuna's bedroom. "I guess it can't be helped," she mumbled to herself as she strolled up the staircase. Opening his bedroom door, his mother saw his room in a mess.
"Ah, as messy as usual....." she sighed as she went to wake him up, but to no avail. "Ah, this happens every morning...." she sighed and noticed a piece of paper sticking out of one of Tsuna's drawer.
"What could this be?" she wondered as she walked towards it. Pulling out the paper, she saw his mathematics test paper with a score of only 15 marks.
"Sigh! This is usual too.." she gave a sigh. "Sawada Tsunayoshi-kun, who received fifteen marks in maths!" Shocked, Tsuna woke up with a start.
Techniques used:
To develop this character, I used both dialogue and actions. As Tsuna has many flaws, I portrayed all of them in this short story excerpt. Quoted from the story, “Aye, as messy as usual” , “Aye, this happens every morning” and “ Failing as usual at only fifteen marks”. This shows that he is weak in his studies, he is a messy and lazy person, and is often late for school.
Dear Aloysius,
ReplyDeleteI think that this story excerpt is very well written. The story line fits in perfectly. You also used the different types of dialogues to further enhance your excerpt, making it look like a real anime movie. However, I think you can do more in describing what your character looks like in order for the readers to have a better idea about your story such as his messy hair.
Thank You.
Zane 2A1(33)